College Student needs help Options

[Cexlica]

thanks

This post has been edited by Cexlica: Mar 4, 2008 - 1:35 AM

[carb0n_f1b3r]

Every good argument has three key components.. Logos- the logical reasoning for your argument, this should give your topic and reasoning validity.. Ethos- should provide an ethical basis for your argument, this shows that your argument is not one-sided and gives a general feeling of good will to counterpoint and further allows you to have alternate routes of logic if necessary.. and finally Pathos- The emotional aspect of your argument this is what will make your argument personal both to the person listening (or reading) and should make it personal to yourself with out compromising objectivity ]

personally i would scrap that whole letter... im not trying to burn you or nothing its just my opinion.. when you talk about "wanting to make models all your life", understand that this is pathos driven. if you start off your letter with this, while it makes your argument more personal, it risks contaminating the ethos of your reasoning nobody wants to listen to a bleeding heart, although it is possible to work this in tone down the emotional volume and place it more towards the middle or end of the letter.. there are words used like leaded? these absolutely have to go use a thesaurus if need be my friend.. Try and understand the perspective of your dean, if your citing girls ect. as a reason for failure A dean will not be impressed by this, it subtly brushes at bragging..another thing that threw a flag was stating that you set a plan that "fits you well" this seems to suggest a lack of implementation within yourself to change rather a circumstantial change is necessary for your success..
Again man, i really don't want you to think that i'm bein rude these are just a few things that i saw
Finally just focus on what is important.. you want to be logical clear and meticulous in your efforts focus more on what your plan(internally and externally) to change the outcome of your next semester than such specific facts of why you failed the last two good luck man and go to class thats more than half the battle

Note: these are just my opinions peppered with facts on connotation, of the 6+billion personalities on the earth your original ideas could be perfectly sufficient it just depends on which way the panties wad..
at alot of colleges the petition letter seems to be just a formality anyway their real agenda amounts to the almighty $